# template **H - Honor the Feedback (ํ”ผ๋“œ๋ฐฑ ์กด์ค‘)** **E - Evoke the Shared Mission (๊ณต๋™์˜ ์‚ฌ๋ช… ์ƒ๊ธฐ)** **R - Redefine the Obstacle (์žฅ์• ๋ฌผ ์žฌ์ •์˜)** **O - Offer a Path Forward (๋ฏธ๋ž˜ ๊ฒฝ๋กœ ์ œ์•ˆ)** # example1 **ํ•ต์‹ฌ ์ „๋žต: "์ด๊ฒƒ์€ Angie์˜ ์‹คํŒจ๊ฐ€ ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ, ์šฐ๋ฆฌ(Angie์™€ ์ง€๋„๊ต์ˆ˜)์˜ ์„ ๊ตฌ์  ์‹œ๋„๊ฐ€ ๋งˆ์ฃผํ•œ ์ œ๋„์  ์žฅ๋ฒฝ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."** ์ด ์‹œ์Šคํ…œ์€ Gibbons (2025)๊ฐ€ ์ œ์‹œํ•œ '๊ท ํ˜• ๊ตฌ์ถ•(Building Equilibrium)'์˜ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๊ณผ์ œ, ์ฆ‰ **์‹ ๋ขฐ์„ฑ(Credibility)**๊ณผ **๋ช…๋ฃŒ์„ฑ(Clarity)** ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ์„ค๊ณ„๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. #### **Part 1: ์‹ ๋ขฐ์„ฑ ๊ตฌ์ถ• (Building Credibility)** _**๋ชฉํ‘œ:** "๋‹น์‹ ์„ ๋ฏฟ์–ด๋„ ๋ ๊นŒ?"๋ผ๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋‹ตํ•˜์—ฌ, Angie๊ฐ€ ํ—Œ์‹ ์ ์ด๊ณ  ํ•ฉ๋ฆฌ์ ์ธ ํŒŒํŠธ๋„ˆ์ž„์„ ์ฆ๋ช…ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค._ - **H - Honor the Feedback (ํ”ผ๋“œ๋ฐฑ ์กด์ค‘):** ์œ„์›ํšŒ์˜ ๊ฒฐ์ •์„ ๊ฒธํ—ˆํžˆ ์ˆ˜์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ์„ฑ์ˆ™ํ•œ ์ „๋ฌธ๊ฐ€๋กœ์„œ์˜ ๋ชจ์Šต์„ ๋ณด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Š” ๊ฐ์ •์  ๋Œ€์‘์ด ์•„๋‹Œ, ์ด์„ฑ์  ํŒ๋‹จ์„ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Œ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๋Š” ์ฒซ๊ฑธ์Œ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. - **E - Evoke the Shared Mission (๊ณต๋™์˜ ์‚ฌ๋ช… ์ƒ๊ธฐ):** Angie์˜ ๋ˆ๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ๋‹จ์ˆœํ•œ ๊ณ ์ง‘์ด ์•„๋‹Œ, ์ง€๋„๊ต์ˆ˜๊ฐ€ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•œ '๋ฒ ์ด์ฆˆ ์ฐฝ์—…'์ด๋ผ๋Š” ๊ณต๋™์˜ ์‚ฌ๋ช…์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ํ—Œ์‹ ์œผ๋กœ ์žฌ์ •์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Š” Angie์˜ ๋™๊ธฐ๊ฐ€ ๊ฐœ์ธ์ ์ธ ์š•์‹ฌ์ด ์•„๋‹Œ, ๋” ํฐ ๋น„์ „์— ์žˆ์Œ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. #### **Part 2: ๋ช…๋ฃŒ์„ฑ ๊ตฌ์ถ• (Building Clarity)** _**๋ชฉํ‘œ:** "์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์•ฝ์†(๋ชฉํ‘œ)์ด ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ๊ฐ€?"๋ผ๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋‹ตํ•˜์—ฌ, ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹คํ–‰ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ๊ฒฝ๋กœ๋ฅผ ์ œ์‹œํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค._ - **R - Redefine the Obstacle (์žฅ์• ๋ฌผ ์žฌ์ •์˜):** ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ 'Angie ๊ฐœ์ธ์˜ ์‹คํŒจ'์—์„œ '์ƒˆ๋กœ์šด ํŒจ๋Ÿฌ๋‹ค์ž„์„ ๊ตฌ์ถ•ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฐœ์ฒ™์ž๊ฐ€ ๊ฒช๋Š” ์‹œ์Šคํ…œ์  ๋„์ „'์œผ๋กœ ์žฌ๊ตฌ์„ฑํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Š” ์ง€๋„๊ต์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋ฌธ์ œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์˜ ์กฐ๋ ฅ์ž๋กœ ์ดˆ๋Œ€ํ•˜๋Š” ํšจ๊ณผ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง‘๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. - **O - Offer a Path Forward (๋ฏธ๋ž˜ ๊ฒฝ๋กœ ์ œ์•ˆ):** ์„์‚ฌ ๊ณผ์ •์„ ๋ฐ•์‚ฌ ๊ณผ์ •์˜ ๊ธฐ์ดˆ๋กœ ์‚ผ๋Š” ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ธ ๊ณ„ํš์„ ์ œ์•ˆํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ํ•„์š”ํ•œ ๊ณผ๋ชฉ ์ด์ˆ˜, ์‹ฌ์ง€์–ด 1ํ•™๋…„์œผ๋กœ ์žฌ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๊นŒ์ง€ ํฌํ•จ๋œ ์ด ์ œ์•ˆ์€ Angie์˜ ์ง„์ •์„ฑ๊ณผ ๋ฌธ์ œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ ์˜์ง€๋ฅผ ๋ช…ํ™•ํžˆ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. **(H) Honor:** Thank you again for the committee's thorough feedback. I especially want to thank you for seeing a clear path for a Master's thesis in my work; your belief in the core idea means a great deal to me. I fully accept that to make a lasting contribution, I must master the foundational tools of organizational economics that you and Professor Fine have rightly emphasized. **(E) Evoke:** The feedback was a crucial diagnostic. It helped me understand that while my commitment to the mission of Bayesian Entrepreneurshipโ€”a mission born from your boot campโ€”is unwavering, my approach to building the required skillset has been incomplete. **(R) Reframe:** You once said you love studying entrepreneurship because it's where you can watch people make hard decisions under uncertainty. I feel I am in that position now. The challenge, as I see it, is how to structure this decision to best serve the long-term goal of building this new field. **(O) Offer:** To that end, I would be grateful for the chance to work with you to frame the Master's thesis not as an endpoint, but as a strategic cornerstone for a PhD dissertation. I want to build a concrete plan with you that directly addresses the committee's concerns, including a proposal for the coursework needed to build that foundation. I am fully committed to this, even if it means formally restarting as a first-year student to get the right training.