2025-07-06
  Long sentences resemble Philippe Petit’s tight‑rope walk: thrilling only when readers feel safe. Rhythm, readability metrics (Flesch/gunning‑fog) and strategic “in‑between space” keep the line taut without snapping.
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| A | **Anomaly** – Writers want grand, legato sentences but keep losing reader breath (run‑ons, pretzel prose, over‑readability formulas). |
| D | **Develops** – Treat long prose like a tight‑rope walk: give the reader “cavaletti” rest‑points (commas, cadence, oases of stability). Subject + verb early, then **cumulative sentence** architecture. |
| G | **Grows (examples)** – Petit’s twin‑tower walk; Burt Lancaster & Tony Curtis in _Trapeze_; Rudolf Flesch readability math; Francis Christensen’s “generative rhetoric”; Joe Wright’s five‑minute Dunkirk tracking shot; appositives & absolutes; algorithmic readability. |
| C | **Contribution** – Shows _Maxim #13_ at scale: sentence‑length variation as suspense‑release cycle; and deepens _Maxim #9_ (full‑stop = landing platform). |
### Example Ledger — Ch. 5
|#|Example|Purpose|
|---|---|---|
|1|Philippe Petit’s 1974 walk (kneel, lie down, 8 crossings)|Central controlling metaphor|
|2|Film _Trapeze_ & circus stunts|What _not_ to do (show‑boating)|
|3|Rudolf Flesch invents “gobbledygook” & readability tests||
|4|Francis Christensen → “cumulative sentence,” Senecan amble||
|5|Long noun‑phrase villains (“road next to the railway line…”)||
|6|Joe Wright’s _Atonement_ tracking shot as sentence analogue||
|7|Algorithms flagging >25‑word sentences; neural nets finishing prose||
|8|Appositives (“park bench … moment of stillness”), absolutes (“his stomach churning”)||
**Maxim placement – Ch. 5**
|Maxim|Explicit locus|
|---|---|
|**#4**|Opening guidance: subject + main verb early (heart‑beat)|
|**#9**|Cavalletti/full‑stop metaphor; Flesch’s breath pauses|
|**#13**|Dunkirk tracking‑shot + cumulative‑sentence exercise|